This is a different post to the one that was planned. It was scheduled to be a dark, twisted tale that had been introduced by the Death Haiku.
Since then, I was informed that a colleague of mine and a woman who I had known for some time had passed away. She was a lovely person, brought joy to the workplace and will be dearly missed by all who had come in to contact with her. My thoughts are with her family and friends at this difficult time.
Therefore I have postponed the planned story for the foreseeable future. Instead I challenged myself to writing a sixty word story. It is light hearted and I enjoyed writing it. It was completed at short notice but I hope you enjoy.
First Dance
The teenagers danced to the sound of classical music. Her hands were placed on his shoulders, his hands rested on her hips, their eyes twinkled and smiles reciprocated. To them, time had stopped and life beyond the room no longer existed; all worries and problems fading into nothingness. They continued to dance as their lips met for the first time.
I loved this. So sweet and lovely. Made me think of my first kiss.
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Thank you for the kind comment ๐
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I got all of the feels reading this story. In only sixty words you managed to transport me to the dance floor and observe their first kiss. So wonderful!
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Thank you for the nice comments ๐
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First, my condolences for your loss. It’s never easy to lose someone. I admire your choice to postpone your short story. It shows true respect.
And what talent you have! – to create such an emotional attachment to two people in just the span of 60 words. I was enthralled by it and the ending left me a little teary. So beautifully written. Thank you for sharing it.
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Thank you for your condolences. I could not bring myself to post such a dark tale as the one planned.
Thank you very much for the comments. It was my first venture into restricted words and was concerned on the finished product. Glad you enjoyed it and thank you for reading! Your feedback is most welcome, all the time ๐
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I think it was a most successful experiment ๐ Can’t wait to see what you come up with next!
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That was really lovely, and describes the thrill of the first date really nicely, too. Good job!!
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Thank you very much. It was interesting to write such a short piece ๐
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I bet it was, sometimes it’s a good idea to limit how much we can work with.
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Yes definitely. It was just enough to toy with and make something out of it.
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Sorry to hear about the loss of your colleague and friend.
The piece was beautiful, and everyone can relate to it. A million people’s stories in minimal words ๐
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Thank you ๐
It took some patience with the correct word count but it got there in the end!
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